competition going on! and from the tagboard, its kill kahjun, minus 5 marks, kill jasmine, plus 2 marks?

OIE KAHJUN! i shall write a story, so, total 30 marks right? and kahjun die minus 5 marks right?hmm.. here goes
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one day, kahjun was walking down the street. he walked on happily, listening to his mp3, a piano dropped down and flattened him, kahjun dies!

kahjun came back to life, and he was crossing the road to school, when a lorry filled with sand fled by and banged him down, also burying him in sand, kahjun dies!

once again, he came back to life, happily sucking on a lollipop in class. but halfway through the lesson, someone whacked him on his back, causing him to choke on the lollipop and therefore, kahjun dies!

kahjun just died of unknown reasons.

well, you know it now, he's coming back to life! this time, he is very careful to not walk under any windows, to cross the road very carefully, not sucking on any lollipops, and not dying a sudden death.

well, here he is now, kahjun the cockroah, who had died four times!
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well, kahjun died four times! wahahaha, hmmm..

guess this story can maximum get a 10 eh?

-jasmine :D
p.s wahaha, who call u whack me with the pillow at geraldine's house! XP

LAMENESS - 7/10
UNREALISTICNESS - 8/10
INTERESTINGNESS - 6/10

TOTAL: 21/10
However, due to certain rules and regulations, her marks have been deducted by 20.

NEW TOTAL: 1/30 <---- MOST PRO 1